The mistake
When I made the mistake
all foolish men make,
she said she'd forgive
and try to let live.
I'm entirely to blame
and I've lived with that shame,
gone way beyond tears
for thirty-odd years.
The words stay unspoken
but the trust is still broken,
a malodorous sore
like a turd on the floor.
She is trying, I know
but she can not let go,
a silent portrayal
of my stupid betrayal.
It is tragedy, Greek,
it is broken Lalique,
never make that mistake
that we foolish men make.
The first and last stanza come across as moving and sincere. I had to google Lalique because I’m an ignoramus when it comes to the finer things. The turd on the floor is more in the line of your humourous poetry. Is that deliberate? Did you want some humour in there?
That is very perceptive. The turd was there for the shock factor, a comment that life is often a mixture of sad, funny and basic all at the same time.
Also, if I’m being 100% honest, I probably put it in because I don’t like to admit even to myself when I am being absolutely serious!
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The first and last stanza come across as moving and sincere. I had to google Lalique because I’m an ignoramus when it comes to the finer things. The turd on the floor is more in the line of your humourous poetry. Is that deliberate? Did you want some humour in there?
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That is very perceptive. The turd was there for the shock factor, a comment that life is often a mixture of sad, funny and basic all at the same time.
Also, if I’m being 100% honest, I probably put it in because I don’t like to admit even to myself when I am being absolutely serious!
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Awesome. Just thought I would mention it because … well clearly there was a shock factor. 😀 So your aim was well and truly achieved.
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Indeed it was. Heaven forbid that anyone should take me too seriously! LOL
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LOL Dr Hobbo… because laughter is good medicine. I think you just got yourself a new tagline. 😉
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LOL. Thank you, Worms!
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like elephants!
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“GASP” not the Lalique!
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Yep, the Lalique! LOL
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Or if you do, be prepared for the poo!! Also googled Lalique, classy stuff. Love the juxtaposition, Hobbo. Wonderful.
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Thank you Karen! Love your summary!
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Anytime, Hobbo. I believe this was the abbreviated version. 😉
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